Aneiejji Bukimyoushu

[Tenkaryu]

( I RETURN!)

Name: Aneiejji Bukimyoushu
Description: abut 5.4 feet tall, dressed entirely in dark Grey, except for a dark blue scarf worn about the mouth and neck and falls to halfway down the back. His shirt is long sleeved, loose, but not baggy, same with the pants, which are tucked into half boots. extremely good at ranged attacks, but his taijutsu, ninjutsu, and genjutsu are slightly under par. what little ninjutsu he does know is mainly wind.

HP: 35/35
AP: 5/5
STA: 10/10 CHK: 5/5

Strength:
Mind:
Vitality:1
Agility:2
Dexterity:2
Cunning:

Jutsu
1.Charging Barrage (-1 AP, -2 STA)
The user dashes forward while throwing a barrage of kunai.
atk 2 - hits first target - taijutsu
[WPN] [-R] [2hf]
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[ ][N][ ][x][x][ ]
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Move - User is moved one space forward.
Forced Defense - If this attack is defended, it triggers forced defense. If this skill is directly followed by an attack, that attack has 50% DEF skill penetration.

2.Gashing Strike (-1 AP, -2 STA)
A stabbing or cutting attack which causes the target to bleed.
atk 1 - single target - taijutsu
[WPN] [-R] [1w]
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[ ][N][x]
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Applicable Weapons: Dagger, Sword, Spear
Bleeding - Target begins bleeding. Bleeding victims suffer -1 health degeneration at the beginning of each turn, and suffer 1 damage if they use 2 or more AP.

3.Whirlwind Kick (-3 AP, -3 STA)
A spinning, mid-air rotation unleashed as a powerful kick.
atk 5 - single target - taijutsu
[STK] [-R] [f]
[ ][ ][ ]
[ ][N][x]
[ ][ ][ ]
Stagger1 - Target is forced back one space
Dizzy1 - Whenever the target uses AP, they must pay double the cost.


4.Wind Element, Air Blast (-1 AP, -1 CHK)
A quick blast of air from the user's palm which forces a target backward.
atk 1 - hits first target - ninjutsu
[ELM] [-R] [2h]
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[ ][N][x][x]
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Stagger1 - Target is forced one space backward.
Half Bonus - This jutsu receives only half of the damage bonus inherited by the user's Mind attribute.

5.Feint Step (-2 AP, -2 STA)
A quick feint step which offsets the target's balance.
atk 1 - single target - taijutsu
[UND] [-R] [f]
[ ][ ][ ]
[ ][N][x]
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Unsteady - If another attack is used immediately after this, the target must pay an additional 1 AP to initiate a defense skill (can be BLK only) and the DEF applied by the skill is halved. If a defense skill is used, it automatically triggers the defense penalty.
Unguardable - This attack cannot be defended

Signature Jutsu

[Arashi Yaiba] [AP:3/Stamina:4/Chakra Cost:4]

[atk 2] - [Select one] - [Taijutsu]
[WPN] [f,1w,2h]
[ ][ ][x][x][ ]
[ ][X][x][x][x]
[ ][ ][x][x][ ]
[Bleeding]
Requires dagger

[Hawk Eye]

The only thing you need to fix is your siggy jutsu. I'm not going to bother checking the cost of the jutsu because there is one inherent flaw you'll have to fix:

*You cannot have the Hits First Target range type unless your jutsu travels down a straight line. Since you have a 3x2+1 range, it won't work. Once you fix your range, we can work on the point calculations.

[Tenkaryu]

gah, didn't see that part, fixed now

[Hawk Eye]

Your jutsu cannot be Single Target if it his more than one square. The only available range types for you jutsu's current range are: Targets All and Select One/Multiple Targets.

[Tenkaryu]

darn, gotta change everything now

[Hawk Eye]

Okay, you're 3 points over, actually. So you could use those points or just reduce the costs and you'll be fine. 7 Stamina is pretty steep, imo, and it probably won't be a luxury you'll have, even at later levels.

[Tenkaryu]

so like that?

[Panicz]

Suggestion: If you make the move a taijutsu, then you'll have an extra point to spend, 'cause in the guide, it's +1 point for every 1 CHK over 1 CHK (for ninjutsu), but just +1 point for every CHK point for taijutsu. It'd give you more to work with, eh? and it just makes more sense to have a WEAPON attack Taijutsu instead of Ninjutsu.

You have one extra point to spend, I believe, on your Signature. But it's good from there. If you do what I suggested above, you'll get an extra point which you'll be able to use with your other point to get an extra 1 DMG, or, you can reduce the cost of STA or CHK by one to even it out.

That's gonna be one killer move if you ever end up pulling it off.

[Tenkaryu]

okay, should be good now (i hope)

[SecretofMana]

Alright, calculations for the signature:

Points to Use

AP: 3 Points gained: 4 ( (3 - 1) * 2)
Stamina: 3 Points gained: 3
Chakra: 4 Points gained: 4
Default points: 5

Total: 16 (4 + 3 + 4 + 5)

Points Used

Attack: 2 Points used: 4 (2 * 2)
Select One Points used: 2
Range: 7 Points used: 6
Effect: Bleeding Points used: 5

Total: 17 (4 + 2 + 6 + 5)

I think you forgot that Select One needs skill points. By this, you would need one more chakra, stamina, or self-damaging for 3 points to make it correct.